Online stories, Nov. 22, Critique

Best things:

       Good work on the writing about the new reusable to-go boxes being used by UTA Dining. Interesting story.

Selby did nice work on the men’s basketball home game coverage. Good use of stats and explaining how the team stopped its losing streak.

Allee showed great initiative on the photo slide show that details some electrical engineering students’ work assembling a wind turbine project.

Needs improvement:

Let’s watch our headlines: The one with Thanksgiving volunteer opportunities says “Arlington.” Only one of the three listed is in Arlington.

In the online degrees story, we say: The program “gives special emphasis to.” Just say “emphasizes.”

In the story about the UTA Dining to-go boxes, we don’t need the first sentence.

Before: Sustainability efforts grow at UTA through a new initiative for washable, to-go boxes.

UTA Dining Services has replaced the styrofoam to-go boxes at the Connection Café with reusable, plastic green containers.

The change is part of a sustainability effort, University Center director David Albart said. It will reduce the carbon footprint on the environment and also reduce food waste.

After: UTA Dining Services has replaced the styrofoam to-go boxes at the Connection Café with reusable, plastic green containers, continuing the university’s sustainability efforts.

The change is part of an ongoing effort, University Center director David Albart said, to reduce the carbon footprint on the environment and also reduce food waste.

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