The title maybe cute the situation isn’t.
I don’t know how else to say it but we still have work to do. We still have a newsletter to produce. I have hardly seen anyone in the newsroom today. We still got work to do guys. I’m disappointed that you have forgotten that.
So let’s talk about this newsletter.
For what little it has in it, there were some bright spots and some spots to work on.
- The non students playing at the MAC? Wow. So some dudes came on campus to play ball and one of them had warrants. This automatically makes it a safety issue. How will the MAC work on safety? The campus? This worries me as a person who’s on this campus because while I know that we are an open, urban campus something as simple as going through an exit door tells me something isn’t right here. I hope we follow up and ask more questions to this.
Also watch the construction of the sentences and where they are. How it reads is that the incident happened Monday but it wasn’t reported until later. Was it? That’s how it reads now.
- The liberal arts dean candidate announced. Good job on getting it up ASAP. That’s what we need here. The first sentence is passive, though. Remember: active sentences. Noun then verb. So the sentence needs to read: Paul Wong, College of Arts and Letters dean at San Diego State University, is the second candidate for UTA’s liberal art dean.
- So, we put the editorial we ran in the paper Wednesday in the newsletter Thursday? Why?
- We’ve had the conquering finals thing on the site before. It’s always been a listicle, which is okay. This one, however, sets us up as if we were the experts. We’re not. We’re getting student input. We need to say that. We’re not the story.
- The softball story: Yowza that first line is harsh. It’s true but harsh. Mostly because you have a 7 seed vs a 6 seed and when its that close anything can happen. Let’s also watch the second sentence that is kinda almost a fragment. It’s a statement, yes but it doesn’t really say anything and I felt like there was a second part that got edited out.
- Open Carry Bill — watch the lede. It reads like it’s going to a vote in the house, not to a committee. That confused me when I read the second sentence and then the other ones which gave me dates in March. With bill stories we need prospective, the what does this mean of things is the most important. So it’s going to committee, what does it mean? What does it mean to average folks?
- Coffee for clark: AWESOME THAT WE COVERED THIS! And we didn’t need a full story. The extended cutlines on this was the exact right play. Great! Here’s how you make that better. We need more than three photos. We need closer to a gallery and maybe a short (less than 1 minute) video about it. We also needed to package this with the story that we’d already written about it. Since we know this is happening Friday, yes? Let’s try for a short video. Or even do a Periscope? Think different. Good start here. Really good. Let’s keep it going.
Alright. Stuff is on the board. I expect some great things and some great work.